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A Poem I made what you think?
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| RealmHunter |
Posted on 02/02/2011 19:43:42
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Well guys I made this, and this sort of open discussion. If someone would give this to you, how you would react, because what you guys say here, might influence my actions in the future.
Life is gentle, and sweet
From when you stare into my soul
You are the one that makes me crave the seconds with you
Your nice calming eyes
Your nice calming lips
Make me beg for you in my sleep
Make me follow you in my waking hours
From your beautiful hair, through your heart, to your feet
You are nice and calm and everlasting and will never end for me
I thank all for your existance, to see you, be with you
Just be mine forever, and life will know no end
Well Please post what you think below, and feel free to vote in the poll if you would react negatively or positively to someone giving this to you.
Love you guys
[ZÅ]Numpty-I remember when we first met, you were a crazy guy, but now, you are actually one of the best people I can talk to. I can talk to you about a lot of things and I thank you for all that you have done, and trust me I'll continue to talk to you on xfire. (P.S. you will always be Jugg to me )
[ZÅ]Flax-You are one of my bestest friends in this world. We have so much in common (sorry we couldn't meet in Disney). Tbh if I didnt talk to you sometimes, I would of done some really stupid stuff.
[ZÅ]Luna-What to say. Well you are a really cool girl to talk to, and tons of fun. Thanks for reading some of my poetry haha  And thx for all the smiles on the servers. I always had to smile when I saw you 
[ZÅ]{FC}BlkAder-You are honestly a great guy. We met here on the clan, and we know a little about each other. And I honestly trust you a lot. Thank you
[ZÅ]{FC}Star-We've been through a lot, you helped me through the bad. You've made the good, better. You mean a lot to me, and I will always continue to talk to you, if you let me that is. Because I know I've done some stupid stuff. And you were the one that helped me.
Last but certainly not least
[ZÅ]{FC}SlimJim-Slim, you've helped me so much. You helped me through those really dark times. Because I feel like you have been there. And sometimes I feel like we have a lot in common. So I felt comftorable talking to you. Thank you so much for all the smiles, the laughs, haha the status game (most of you wont understand this). Also I am really sorry, but this is why I didn't want you to give me a game, I'm so sorry. |
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| ZA numpty |
Posted on 02/02/2011 20:01:03
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ShawnPeezy
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its good but the make me follow you in my waking hours may creep them out it may make them feel like u stalk them |
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| ZA Googly |
Posted on 02/02/2011 20:02:47
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Well first of all, it would depend on who it came from. For instance, if it came from someone i do not like or love then i would have to react understanding that the person sending this likes/loves me but i would not do anything really. On the other hand, if it comes from someone you like or love then i would totally love it and be with the person. It depends on situation or instance, and as for the poem: it is pretty good. Although, there are some words that are overused and could incorporate some different types of words and then it might have a more nice flow to it as well. This is just my thoughts on this.
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| ZA Bvigil |
Posted on 02/02/2011 20:59:03
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matters if you know her well and your friends i think its awesome sauce however if your not i think she might think your a stalker BUT its a good poem
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| FC_banana |
Posted on 02/03/2011 01:32:36
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if it was someone of the other gender, and id like him/her too, then positive, if i dont like her, positive, but not that much, and if same gender, run and scream 
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| ninja |
Posted on 02/03/2011 11:52:29
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Sweet!
My brain is open.
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| RealmHunter |
Posted on 02/03/2011 15:51:30
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well i nvr really intend to give this to any1, well i did, but thats a story i dont want to indulge into, i just wanted ppl to say what they think
Love you guys
[ZÅ]Numpty-I remember when we first met, you were a crazy guy, but now, you are actually one of the best people I can talk to. I can talk to you about a lot of things and I thank you for all that you have done, and trust me I'll continue to talk to you on xfire. (P.S. you will always be Jugg to me )
[ZÅ]Flax-You are one of my bestest friends in this world. We have so much in common (sorry we couldn't meet in Disney). Tbh if I didnt talk to you sometimes, I would of done some really stupid stuff.
[ZÅ]Luna-What to say. Well you are a really cool girl to talk to, and tons of fun. Thanks for reading some of my poetry haha And thx for all the smiles on the servers. I always had to smile when I saw you
[ZÅ]{FC}BlkAder-You are honestly a great guy. We met here on the clan, and we know a little about each other. And I honestly trust you a lot. Thank you
[ZÅ]{FC}Star-We've been through a lot, you helped me through the bad. You've made the good, better. You mean a lot to me, and I will always continue to talk to you, if you let me that is. Because I know I've done some stupid stuff. And you were the one that helped me.
Last but certainly not least
[ZÅ]{FC}SlimJim-Slim, you've helped me so much. You helped me through those really dark times. Because I feel like you have been there. And sometimes I feel like we have a lot in common. So I felt comftorable talking to you. Thank you so much for all the smiles, the laughs, haha the status game (most of you wont understand this). Also I am really sorry, but this is why I didn't want you to give me a game, I'm so sorry. |
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| RazNinjaMike |
Posted on 02/03/2011 15:59:44
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Poem is about perfect. just need to fix
Your nice calming eyes
Your nice calming lips
Because the words are the same except the endword |
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| ZA Luna |
Posted on 02/03/2011 18:20:16
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I got a big blue star for posting. i must be special
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lol banana (everytime i see the word 'banana' i think of the joke a friend of i make..... BANANANANANANAS!' ok back on topic, it a good poem realm, and raz, if he ment to do it, he doesn't need to fix it. it would be repetition.
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| ZA numpty |
Posted on 02/03/2011 19:28:33
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ShawnPeezy
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repetition is a tool used a lot by poets |
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| RealmHunter |
Posted on 02/03/2011 19:41:24
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lol, some1 knows literary of speech lol, some1 must pay attention in english class
Love you guys
[ZÅ]Numpty-I remember when we first met, you were a crazy guy, but now, you are actually one of the best people I can talk to. I can talk to you about a lot of things and I thank you for all that you have done, and trust me I'll continue to talk to you on xfire. (P.S. you will always be Jugg to me )
[ZÅ]Flax-You are one of my bestest friends in this world. We have so much in common (sorry we couldn't meet in Disney). Tbh if I didnt talk to you sometimes, I would of done some really stupid stuff.
[ZÅ]Luna-What to say. Well you are a really cool girl to talk to, and tons of fun. Thanks for reading some of my poetry haha And thx for all the smiles on the servers. I always had to smile when I saw you
[ZÅ]{FC}BlkAder-You are honestly a great guy. We met here on the clan, and we know a little about each other. And I honestly trust you a lot. Thank you
[ZÅ]{FC}Star-We've been through a lot, you helped me through the bad. You've made the good, better. You mean a lot to me, and I will always continue to talk to you, if you let me that is. Because I know I've done some stupid stuff. And you were the one that helped me.
Last but certainly not least
[ZÅ]{FC}SlimJim-Slim, you've helped me so much. You helped me through those really dark times. Because I feel like you have been there. And sometimes I feel like we have a lot in common. So I felt comftorable talking to you. Thank you so much for all the smiles, the laughs, haha the status game (most of you wont understand this). Also I am really sorry, but this is why I didn't want you to give me a game, I'm so sorry. |
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| ZA numpty |
Posted on 02/03/2011 19:48:51
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ShawnPeezy
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actually no i didnt. i hated english last year when we had to do poetry. im just smart |
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| RazNinjaMike |
Posted on 02/03/2011 22:12:45
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Erm jug. If a repetition poem is to be done. Then it need to be continued. It disrupt the flow of the poem to have that chucked in the poem randomly.( no offense realm) As i said, its a really good poem. Keep up the great work! |
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| ZA numpty |
Posted on 02/04/2011 06:32:15
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ShawnPeezy
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not necessarily raze. poems can be done in any way shape or form. there are really no rules u have to follow for poetry. u just take whats inside and bring it to the surface. |
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| RazNinjaMike |
Posted on 02/04/2011 07:39:36
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Touche jug....touche...You win this round. |
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| ZA Luna |
Posted on 02/04/2011 08:53:18
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I got a big blue star for posting. i must be special
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i love english class
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| RealmHunter |
Posted on 02/04/2011 15:59:09
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ugh ive hated english class since like 9th grade, i keep getting these god awful english teachers, that dont know what they are doing. i really hate it
Love you guys
[ZÅ]Numpty-I remember when we first met, you were a crazy guy, but now, you are actually one of the best people I can talk to. I can talk to you about a lot of things and I thank you for all that you have done, and trust me I'll continue to talk to you on xfire. (P.S. you will always be Jugg to me )
[ZÅ]Flax-You are one of my bestest friends in this world. We have so much in common (sorry we couldn't meet in Disney). Tbh if I didnt talk to you sometimes, I would of done some really stupid stuff.
[ZÅ]Luna-What to say. Well you are a really cool girl to talk to, and tons of fun. Thanks for reading some of my poetry haha And thx for all the smiles on the servers. I always had to smile when I saw you
[ZÅ]{FC}BlkAder-You are honestly a great guy. We met here on the clan, and we know a little about each other. And I honestly trust you a lot. Thank you
[ZÅ]{FC}Star-We've been through a lot, you helped me through the bad. You've made the good, better. You mean a lot to me, and I will always continue to talk to you, if you let me that is. Because I know I've done some stupid stuff. And you were the one that helped me.
Last but certainly not least
[ZÅ]{FC}SlimJim-Slim, you've helped me so much. You helped me through those really dark times. Because I feel like you have been there. And sometimes I feel like we have a lot in common. So I felt comftorable talking to you. Thank you so much for all the smiles, the laughs, haha the status game (most of you wont understand this). Also I am really sorry, but this is why I didn't want you to give me a game, I'm so sorry. |
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| ZA Wunder Rofl |
Posted on 02/09/2011 21:33:32
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lol i have the best 7th grade english teacher EVER; im in his "A Squad"
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